Blogs...

[ionicle]

i was just wondering, does anyone else have a blog?...

i only recently got one, and having never seen a blog before, i didnt know where to start, so ive started anyway...if anyone fancies reading my attempt to make somthing ive never seen/heard/written before, then by all means:

http://ionicles.blogspot.com/

 

[yassarikhan786]

I'll check it out

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[ionicle]

thank you

opinion?

 

[Lollipop]

Allergic to alcohol.... Never heard of that!

Quite interesting!

I do also hate smokers! God i can't believe hoe people can even be so stupid to start!

 

[ionicle]

there's not just that blog, there are 5 parts to it....

....i do rant a lot...

keep scrolling down, there are more.

 

[yassarikhan786]

An interesting read on your views. You really need to start capitalizing your "I's" and the first letter of each paragraph. Also your sentences drag on a bit and you could use full stops every now and then to avoid really long sentences. Other than that, a very good start

. I'm not being mean in any way, I'm just providing some constructive criticism to help improve your writing

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[ionicle]

i never was any good with writing, with me its more about content than punctuation and grammatical content

my view on the world are a bit...strange, i know that much.

just thought they might be worth sharing.

 

[yassarikhan786]

i never was any good with writing, with me its more about content than punctuation and grammatical content

my view on the world are a bit...strange, i know that much.

just thought they might be worth sharing.

Your writing is fine apart from those minor niggles. They don't take anything away from your writing, its just that doing the things I mentioned would improve the presentation slightly

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[ionicle]

ah righto, ill be adding todays installment soon

 

[8bitbreed]

An interesting read on your views. You really need to start capitalizing your "I's" and the first letter of each paragraph. Also your sentences drag on a bit and you could use full stops every now and then to avoid really long sentences. Other than that, a very good start

. I'm not being mean in any way, I'm just providing some constructive criticism to help improve your writing

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Lol... I think you should have pm'ed this.

Sorry OP, your thread got hijacked.

 

[yassarikhan786]

Lol... I think you should have pm'ed this.

Sorry OP, your thread got hijacked.

I didn't see any reason to. I didn't say the writing was bad, I just pointed out a few things that could improve the presentation and flow of the writing. Other than that I felt that his blog was an interesting read.

 

[ionicle]

latest editions are up for people to read

 

[ionicle]

new edition posted...if anyone is interested