Opinions: Beware Poetry

[FarFarAway]

Just wondering what you lot think of these. Ive written many more but these are a couple that seem to be ok to post on here

The Watchers

Control over the masses

The spying eyes standing tall over the buildings

Mapping out lives

Recording events going nowhere

Only needed

To prove guilt

The wide lens focus leering at its subjects

Nothing noticed or unnoticed

The legal disclaimer for this perverse

Remote-control

‘CCTV IN OPERATION’

Kings Cross Cues

A thin grey veil entrances me

As I look out on traffic-encrusted streets

Scuttling pedestrians

Avoiding snarling cubes of metal

Stopping only for red

Released greyhounds on

Amber-green

Rushing to the next stop

Paying charges

To sit in congestion



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[PV5150]

Nice one mate, I quite like those Keep up the great work

 

[Ham]

Ive never been a fan of poetry But did think the first one was rather clever.

 

[emma]

I think they are both good matt but i prefered the second one. I wish i was talkented like that. I have no talents lol.

 

[glocktodahead]

Very nice poems. I especially enjoyed your use of words in the second one and how you made it sound like the vehicles were like beasts. Keep up the good work

 

[FarFarAway]

Thanks all

I've got quite a few more but haven't written any in a few months

 

[Dav0s]

hehe u sent me that first one last year soemtime, and i enjoyed it